We people
We people:-
This paragraph was written by Hooria(me) and corrected by Joan.
In this age people have become materialistic. They hanker after wealth and want to accumulate a heap of wealth. It is good to have reasonable amount in hand, but more than need is is burden on self.
God has created everything and has promised to provide the necessities of every living being at its door steps, so why this rush and quest of wealth.
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Corrected paragraph
In this age people have become materialistic. They hanker after wealth and want to accumulate a heap of wealth. It is good to have a reasonable amount in hand, but more than one needs (or “more than you need”) is is a burden on oneself. (or “on yourself”)
God has created everything and has promised to provide the necessities of every living being at its doorsteps, so why this rush and quest for wealth?
Very beautifully written! I made just a few very minor corrections, in red. Excellent work!
